I am really not happy with the three chapters about to appear in SEGMENT: SHO-CAUDAL #5, but that's what is there. I think it needs to be told from the viewpoint of - the new arrival. Too much plot given away even to say who that is. The discovery of the world through the eyes of a newcomer seems to be the right way to go.
One of the strengths of STAR TREK was it did not explain everything, it just USED the technology, WENT to the places, and MET strange people with seafood on their heads. I tried that approach with the draft I'm about to release... and it does not feel right.
I know my story, I know the scenes, I know where it is going, and longtime Jorunis will enjoy it. But my worry is that ONLY longtime Jorunis will enjoy it.
And that's not a way to improve the access to Jorune.
Oh well. #5 coming up. I grumble.